One of my Many Creative Writing Samples

[MGTOW KnightParticipant 7477]

So guys one of my favorite hobbies is creative writing and making music. I wanted to share some of my work with you guys and get your opinions. Let me know what you think.

The Lonely Man

By MGTOW KNIGHT

He’s drinking, and likes it when she misbehaves
The way she moves her body, he’s becoming her slave
This feeling is sweeping over him like a tidal wave
But, morally his situation has become quite grave,

He knows that this is dumb,
Yet now he can’t feel his gums
The ecstasy has set in, so now he’s numb,
To this sensation he has become succumbed

But he says he doesn’t really mind it
With his teeth and cheeks grinding,
He searches here telling himself, “I will eventually find it”
For him, this is love where he confined it

He’s in a strip club
And can never get enough
The way this particular girl backs it up
He figures, “She must really like it rough”.

Yet, this infatuation for him, is a fib
Because if he took her to his crib,
The situation would be different
So, what the hell is this?

Is this a poor notion of love?
A fleeting, fading touch?
Or is he simply seeking a carnal rush?
In reality, his soul has become mere mush

He knows inside he’s torn
He truly wants something more,
For want he is longing for,
Is simply inside another door,

He puts up a tough exterior,
Because his mother called him inferior
He knows it is nonsense,
Because his conscience
Tells him that he could be superior

But, reality flashes back,
His consciousness retracts
Morality is what he truly lacks
And along the road, he refused to turn back

His money she has outrun
So, unfortunately this dance is done,
Is body remains numb,
Truth sets in, to the man he has become

So, he stumbles to the bathroom mirror
In hope that things could me made clearer
Yet he knows, only one thing ever appears
The darkness he loathes, draws nearer

He takes one last swig of his beer
And, one thing finally becomes clear
He is just a lonely man with fear,
Just a depressed, lonely man with fear

He thinks of all those who he held dear
Only to realize, they have all disappeared
He draws a colt 45 from his underwear
“BANG!” is all anyone hears

Fuck bitches... literally and metaphorically

[Greg HondaParticipant 6406]

Rhymes well.

I think you may be onto something with creative writing.

However:

Thought the idea of going to a strip club on “E” was insane. Why not go to a dance club and have a really great night?

I also didn’t like the way the story ended. Just make the guy look, like a sad failiure, who’s better off dead. Not the picture I want in my head 🙂

You’ve got me doing it now!

It's Time to get Wise

[MGTOW KnightParticipant 7477]

Greg Honda wrote:

Rhymes well.

I think you may be onto something with creative writing.

However:

Thought the idea of going to a strip club on “E” was insane. Why not go to a dance club and have a really great night?

I also didn’t like the way the story ended. Just make the guy look, like a sad failiure, who’s better off dead. Not the picture I want in my head

You’ve got me doing it now!

Yeah this piece was inspired by a cousin who unfortunately committed suicide. He served his country for 4 tours in Iraq, just to find how that his wife cheated on him with CHAD. She filed for divorce, and with his poorly managed PTSD he fell into the depths of despair. I loved him and looked up to him. When this happened I was devastated and wanted to capture what I felt was going on in his head at that moment. The story is a little embellished, but I think it conveys the message that men aren’t invincible. I saw one of the strongest men in my life fall at the hands of depression and some narcissistic t~~~. Society paints men as an disposable. That is what my cousin felt. I wished he would’ve talked to me. He just shut the family out. We tried everything we could. It wasn’t enough. I wish he was still here.

Fuck bitches... literally and metaphorically

[Anonymous 43]

ummm well, not all poetry is unicorns and rainbows, is it.

I’m feeling it brother. At what point after being cut loose by everyone you love do you decide to end it? I thought I was there in 2009 when my wife said she wasn’t happy, get out. At that point I thought I had no alternative. Being married, father to 2 kids, suburb house, dog, and a couple cars was as good as it gets, that was the perfect life for me. Why did the wife cut me loose, I did everything she asked, I paid her debts, helped her get the things she wanted, took care of the house, the kids, f~~~ I was in the middle of a huge landscaping project and my dad was going to give us money for a new brick driveway and 500 feet of plastic fencing. Dad also had a huge secret trust for the kids college. Why was she f~~~ing all of that up? What did I do wrong was all I could think for several days. What did I do wrong? Having no good answer, I thought it was something in me that was f~~~ed up. I had to remove me from the family, and from myself.

Your poem is honest. I’m sure if fits many men’s reality. Denied female companionship, watching some chick dancing on a stage is cold comfort. You can look but you can’t touch. And looking just isn’t enough. The way women are today, they had better get used to the look but don’t touch world they created. I’m at the point where I don’t even look any more. I can’t have a pretty girlfriend, I don’t have the cash, the alpha vibe, the resources. I have to move in a few days, reduce my belongings down to a couple boxes and start over again. I can’t have a pretty girlfriend, this is the only town for 50 miles around, 20,000 people here, half women, half of those are not married and most of them are single moms, speak Spanish or are fugly beyond belief. The rest are old overcatted grandmothers.

Your poem is truth. We were all sold a bill of goods. Men would have a faithful woman taking care of kids and home and being the only one for life. Men want basic comfort and satisfaction. Women were promised some f~~~ing Prince Charming would sweep them off their feet and life happily ever after. Women want the castle, the servants and the horse drawn carriage or some such bulls~~~. Comfort and satisfaction are alien concepts to them. More, bigger, shinier more resources, more stuff! because there is always more to have and acquire. When a better prince with a bigger castle more resources or whatever shows up, f~~~ Prince Charming, I’m with Prince Chad now.

Once we rinsed the bulls~~~ from our eyes and realized what society, the courts and the women were doing to us, we can exclude women from our lives as much as we want, but the lack of human touch is an absolute killer. The closest I can get to being touched is the chick handing me my debit card at the drive up window at the burger joint. That wonderful electric feeling from holding a woman’s hand and looking into her eyes, Jesus I miss that the most. I can never have that magical feeling ever again. I can’t look a woman in the eyes and not think how is she going to take everything I have in a couple years or weeks. God Damn Red f~~~ing pill. F~~~!

F~~~ the thing that saves me from a horrible miserable life. I want to be 20 and think women are magical and worth chasing. I want to feel that stupid happy go lucky feeling walking through a mall and asking girls for phone numbers or sharing lunch with some chick. It was wonderfully stupid to be that ignorant of the world and just not give a s~~~…I want to fall in love two or three times a day walking down the sidewalk at the beach. I want to sit in a s~~~ty desk in some college and wonder if the girl next to me wants to do homework with me later. I want to work out in the yard, and my pretty wife brings me a glass of water and then shoves me into the shed and we play grabass.

I can’t have any of that. That has passed. Or it will never happen again. I have different things to look forward to.

Sorry. I’m talking to much. Your poem is nice bro, thank you for sharing.

[MGTOW KnightParticipant 7477]

Anonymous wrote:

Sorry. I’m talking to much. Your poem is nice bro, thank you for sharing.

No need to apologize. I find your situation to be compelling. You were literally going to give her the white picket fence, and even that wasn’t enough to appease her. I think women are more superficial than men. The thing I don’t understand is if women are the emotional sex, then how can they so blind to other’s well being? It doesn’t make sense to me. Man I feel for you. Are you close to your children?

Fuck bitches... literally and metaphorically

[Anonymous 43]

kids told me to go away last year. they are poisoned and lost.
court order prohibits contact.

Do not equate emotional to maturity. I think women are a slightly higher form of children.

[MGTOW KnightParticipant 7477]

Anonymous wrote:

kids told me to go away last year. they are poisoned and lost.
court order prohibits contact.

Wow she turned them against you to! SMH I’m in disbelieve.

Fuck bitches... literally and metaphorically

[Anonymous 43]

shocking isn’t it? how could a loving mother f~~~ over her children that way….

Yeah, the stay at home dad turned school teacher is the asshole in this deal…riiiiiiight.

[MGTOW KnightParticipant 7477]

Damn man. I will being praying for you. Too many men with similar situations. I’ve seen what the modern marriage does to men. I liken it to holding a grenade and letting the women having her finger on the pin. It isn’t a matter of if she will pull it, it is just a matter of when…

Fuck bitches... literally and metaphorically

[joetechParticipant]

May, are these kids teenagers yet? I’ve grown despondent toward women and stories like yours only make me realize how little I need them. When the kids are adults they’ll either be entitled little brats that no one can stand, or they’ll realize what a s~~~ mommy really was. That Chad she’s living with will have his day, too. She’ll repeat her behavior with him, throwing him out as well. The kids will be closer to adulthood when that happens. I wonder how they’ll view mommy then?

"Don't follow in my footsteps...I stepped in something."

[Anonymous 43]

lol kids are 15 and 18 omg 15 already Jebus on the cross! where has the time gone?

yeah, I figure the kids are a huge drain financially and emotionally on the c~~~. older kid is at a $80K a year art school. Good. I know they have to go along to get along. When they are out from under the c~~~’s influence and money maybe they will come and find me.

Sucks to be Chad…paying for my kids and he has 2 kids of his own. lol not my f~~~n problem.

I have my own problems. like liquidating my possessions this week. F~~~ I hate moving and starting over. the up side is getting out of this cowtown. The air smells like beef jerky all the time, jerky, cow s~~~ and dust, tumbleweeds and oil.

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